40. Revisions to pitch and final decisions in light of feedback

We received both positive and negative feedback. However, the negative feedback will help to improve our pitch. We need to revise our pitch and make some changes as a result of the feedback.

Positive Feedback:

• The basic idea of our story is good - a high-school drama focusing on three girls. It's different to what most of the class is doing. This gives us our unique selling point (USP).
• The storyboards are very well drawn and planned.
• Fox Searchlight Pictures is a very good choice.
• Our animatic  on Final Cut Pro

Constructive Criticism:

• The storyboards are good, but there are a few suggestions that can be added to improve them.
• The shots of the girls getting ready in the college toilets could be changed to them getting ready at home in the bathroom of one of the girls.
• Flashbacks are hard to incorporate into our film, and our audience may not understand that it's a flashback. If we intend on keeping the flashback we must make it clear for the audience i.e. voice over. The idea of flash-backing  out of the sequence then flash-backing back in could complicate our opening sequence, so it would be good to add it at the end.
• When we talked about representation we didn't quite differentiate between different social groups and character types, which are two different things. Our social group, in terms of our ethnicity, class, gender, and so on, is different from someone who is a bit nerdy and cheeky.
• Make the soundtrack more girly, more feminine and indicating fun.

 Final decisions in light of feedback:

• Few suggestions that can be added to improve the storyboards.
• The shots of the girls getting ready in the college toilets could be changed to them getting ready at home in the bathroom of one of the girls.
• Add flashback to the end of the opening sequence.
• Differentiate between different social groups and character types properly.